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The Ghost in the Attic
by
Debbie Thomas

Ellie slammed her bedroom door. Dad was a pig. Why couldn’t she have a pet? All her classmates had one. Claire had a kitten, Meg had a rabbit and even weedy Neil had a goldfish. They were perfect matches for cheeky Claire, gentle Meg and – well, weedy – Neil.
Bored, brainy Ellie craved company. Her family had just moved into an ancient cottage, miles (well, two) from anywhere (a one-shop village). With no brothers or sisters, her nearest playmates were fussy chickens from the farm opposite. And they would never do as pets. Since when did anyone take chickens for a walk?
But Dad was refusing to budge. ‘Forget it.’
‘But whhhyyy?’
‘Hmm, now where shall I start? Dad stroked his chin and widened his eyes, pretending to be puzzled. Ellie hated that; he knew exactly where to start. And finish. ‘Well. First, we’ve just moved in and the last thing we need is a cage to clean. Second, the cost. Animals don’t eat air, you know. Then getting someone to look after it if we’re away. In case you hadn’t noticed, we’re not exactly swamped by neighbours. And last,’ he glared, ‘the poo.’
‘Dennis,’ said Mum quietly. That was the closest she ever came to criticising him.
‘It’s true, Janice. Who’s going to clean up the mess? I’m not having stinky piles around the house.’
‘But…’ began Ellie.
‘Look, let’s see how you feel in a month. Maybe we’ll think about a tortoise. At least they do it outside.’
‘Boring!’ With a murderous ‘Rrmmfff,’ Ellie stormed to her room.
Where now she raged. ‘Grrrah,’ she growled. ‘Pig.’
‘Nnrrr,’ she snarled. ‘Poo.’
‘Hhnnff,’ she sniffed. ‘Pig poo.’
What sort of pet would really give Dad a hard time? A wolf? A crocodile? ‘Ha!’ she grunted. ‘A dinosaur. That’s what I need. Teach him a lesson… show him who’s boss… whassat?’ She glanced up. A noise was coming from above the ceiling, half-gasp, half-croak, as if someone or something were clearing its throat.
Ellie hadn’t been up to the attic yet. Her parents had glanced in before buying the house and said it was just a big empty space. Without pausing to worry if it was really wise, she crept out of her room, tiptoed up the stairs and pushed the door open.
Resting on its narrow belly lay a winged dinosaur. A model, of course. Except that now it was sort of crawling, sort of floating towards her and a nervous smile was creasing the edge of its mouth. The creature was like a pelican gone wrong: stretched greenish skin for wings; grey fur instead of feathers; a long beak, and a bony crest above the head. Behind its wings tapered two clawed feet. From beak to claw tips it measured about a metre and its wingspan was at least two. Halfway along each wing curled three more little claws.
Ellie gasped. ’Pte… Pteranodon?!?’ Dinosaurs were her favourite subject at school.
‘Pleased to meet you. I’m Pterence with a P.’ The monster’s voice was dry and raw, as if it hadn’t drunk anything for millions of years. It wiggled its wing claws in greeting. Gaping like a fish, she managed: ‘Ellie. How… wha… where do you come from?’
‘The Cretaceous,’ he rasped. ‘That’s where I hatched, and that’s where I died soon after.’
‘So you’re a… ‘
‘Yes, but pleased don’t be scared. I wouldn’t hurt a fly. Or even a fish nowadays,’ he added wistfully.
Ellie, whose second favourite subject was ghosts, remembered that ghosts don’t eat.
‘H… how did you get here?’
‘It’s a long story – 65 million years long actually – but I won’t bore you. In a nutshell: I lost my family and died of a broken heart. Since then it’s been miserable. Whenever I’ve appeared down the ages there’s been trouble. You’d think animals would’ve evolved some manners in all this time, wouldn’t you? No such luck. From mammoths to man it’s been nothing but shrieking and running away.’ Pterence sniffed. ‘So now I only appear where I know I’m welcome. And you just said you need a dinosaur, didn’t you?’
There was a lot to take in but three things struck Ellie immediately. First, like her, he was lonely. Second, if she yelped he’d vanish forever. And third, what a perfect pet: interesting to say the least; easy to hide from her parents (who would definitely not make him welcome); no appetite, and – above all – no mess.
‘Pterence,’ she said, very calmly for a girl addressing a prehistoric ghost. ‘Do you know what a school is?’ His black eyes misted at the memory. ‘A slap-up lunch for me and mum?’
‘I don’t mean fish,’ grinned Ellie. ‘It’s where I go to learn about… dinosaurs and things. Would you come with me tomorrow? There’s a whole class of children who’d really welcome you.’
That night neither Ellie nor Pterence slept, Ellie out of excitement and Pterence out of being a ghost. The next morning he floated through the attic floor into her bedroom, then vanished to slip through her parents’ room and the front door. He flew invisibly to school, revealing nothing but a claw tip at the bus window to reassure Ellie he was there.
During Assembly, Pterence perched invisibly on a beam, fanning Ellie with his wings.
‘Draughty today,’ murmured Meg next to her.
Science was the first lesson.
‘Now where was I?’ bumbled Mr. Marl, Ellie’s soft-hearted teacher. ‘Oh yes, dinosaurs. Who knows why they died out?’
Neil shot up a weedy hand. ‘Meteorite?’
‘Yup, that’s my favourite theory.’ Mr Marl turned to write it on the board.
‘Actually,’ croaked someone, ‘it’s nonsense.’
‘Whoever said that, please put your hand up.’
‘Please Sir, I’ve only got claws.’ A grey shape slowly appeared. Pterence was hovering above the blackboard. The children gasped and jumped from their chairs. Mr. Marl fell over backwards.
‘S… sorry to frighten you,’ mumbled Pterence, looking nervously at Ellie.
‘It’s OK,’ she announced. ‘He’s my pet. Pterence, the Pteranodon chick, meet Class 3a. Please be kind to him, everyone, or he’ll disappear. He’s a ghost, you see.’
As the class gawped and Mr Marl grinned stupidly, Pterence took over the lesson.
‘There was no meteorite. It was those pesky mammals. I saw it with my own eyes. I was playing in the sand one day while my mum sat on her new clutch of eggs. Mum flew off to catch some fish. I waited and waited but she never came back. Then, before you could say “Dimetrodon,” a family of shrews ran up, grabbed all eight eggs and scuttled off to breakfast. I screeched for mum but she still didn’t come. So there I was, all alone. And, well, I’m afraid I died of heartbreak. Forget climate change. It was the egg stealers who killed us.’
There was silence. Then Ellie started to clap. The class joined in. Someone whooped. Mr. Marl, forgetting Pterence was a ghost, came up to shake his wing claws and grabbed air.
‘Thank you,’ beamed the teacher. ‘The mammal theory was always my favourite.’
The children clamoured for Pterence’s signature until someone remembered that autographs were post-Cretaceous. They settled for Ellie’s instead. By the end of the lesson Pterence had never felt more loved and Ellie was coolest girl in class. After the lesson she advised Pterence to disappear. Miss Kneader wouldn’t appreciate his disruptive presence in domestic science, she warned, and he’d be bored silly by Mr Alge’s mathematical wanderings. But her classmates giggled and nudged her all day, snatching a few whispered jokes with Pterence when the teachers weren’t listening. Mr Marl, blissfully happy to know the truth about dinosaur extinctions, promised he wouldn’t let on to anyone.
Leading her invisible pet to the bus stop after school, Ellie had a brilliant idea.
‘Hey Pterence, come and have a look in here.’ She pointed to the museum. Beyond the costumes and stuffed animals they came to the Prehistoric Life room. And there, at the far end, was a huge glass case containing a single fossil. Pterence, who felt he could safely appear in the empty room, peered inside. He gasped.
‘MUM! Is that you? That’s my mum, Ptheresa!’ How did she get in there?’ Before Ellie could marvel at the coincidence – let alone explain about fossils – Pterence was flapping his wings. He lowered his beak, grinned at Ellie and flew at the glass.
Ellie stared. There on the shale lay two fossil Pteranodons, mother and baby, cuddling close at last.
She stroked the glass. ‘Bye Pterence. Rest in peace.’ He’d been a great pet, if only for a day. But now he’d come home. Plus she was the most popular girl in class. Plus it would have been a bit stressful keeping him secret. Ellie waved to the fossils and turned to go. She smiled.
Maybe it was time to consider a tortoise after all.

 

• Judging the competition, Pamela Cleaver said Debbie's story was 'light and funny and had a very happy ending'.

 

Shortlisted
Entries shortlisted to final judging stage in the Writing for Children competition were from: David Allen, Poulton-le-Fylde, Lancashire; Laura Armitage, Crosby, Merseyside; Alison Bater, Barnstaple, Devon; Gillian Brazier, Gossops Green, Crawley, West Sussex; Anna Carpenter, Woodford Green, Essex; Moira Macdonald, Edinburgh; Eva Marshall, Grimsby; Norma Marx, Jerusalem, Israel; Liz McPherson, Calverley, Yorkshire.