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Competition Showcase – The Last Shift by Wendy Fernridge

 

About Wendy Fernridge
Wendy Fernridge works for NHS Blood and Transplant UK in the Donor Records Department, but that department is due to close June 2008. Her ambition then is to find employment where her writing skills could develop further. ‘Although I am not a member of a writing group, I love to read and have done so for as long as I can remember,’ she says. ‘My local librarian thinks it’s hilarious that I can borrow a Jane Austen, Ben Elton and a Stephen King novel at the same time!

‘Although I studied A level English Literature it never occurred to me to take up writing and I went on to work in a bank, although I never stopped reading. Years later an advert for a writing course sparked my imagination that led to me submitting my first piece of work, an article for The Countryman. It was accepted and earned me £90.00. My brother then introduced me to Writers’ News and Writing Magazine.

‘The magazines help me to thoroughly enjoying writing, which I do as much as I can in my spare time. My imagination does tend to lead me to write about the dark side of life, and I hope to continue doing this.’

The Last Shift

by Wendy Fernridge



Jack gave his hands a rub. It was going to be another cold one he thought, gazing up at the sky. It was such a clear night that it seemed to him the stars shone with an unusual, almost supernatural, brightness. The frost, already settling on the ground in a blanket, crunched under his safety boots like glass. Something, perhaps a hedgehog, rustled through fallen leaves nearby. He paused briefly to look up into the night sky once again before turning on his heels briskly and stepping inside.
His footsteps echoed on the concrete floor as he strode confidently across the empty factory. It was just a hollow shell now, unused, silent, dead. Looking across the vast floor space, Jack could remember what it had been like in the past. Once a thriving business, the place had buzzed with the sound of hundreds of people working the vast machines. Many lives had been played out here. He could almost hear the deafening roar of the pulsating equipment as ghosts from the past floated in front of his eyes. It was as though the old place had come alive again. Female laughter drifted across from the offices and staff room as colleagues shared a private joke. It had somehow always appeared to come alive more at night. Maybe it just felt that way against the oppressive darkness outside.
So many things had happened here. Many lives had become entwined through work or fate, Jack wasn’t sure which. There was the time when Jimmy had married Pat from Wages. Jack and a few others had trimmed up his machine with balloons and condoms. They’d even managed to smuggle in a few cans to celebrate at the end of the shift and some of the girls had thrown confetti over him and shoved it down his shirt. He chuckled to himself at this particular memory and then sobered as he remembered when Keith had a heart attack right in the middle of a night shift. He could still see his figure laid out on the floor by the side of his machine, which was still whirring and grinding as if nothing had happened. Still, they’d all had a whip round for his missus while he was laid up in hospital. Never was quite the same after that though, died three years later.
Jack had done most of his growing up inside these walls. He had seen many of his birthdays come and go during his service in the old place. He’d lost his virginity here, round the back of the garages with Patsy Wainright. She had been one feisty lady! Always ready for a laugh. His future wife had worked here too and he’d witnessed three of his own born and then all grown up during his time here. Six grandchildren was something to be proud of! The annual summer works trip to the east coast had always been an important date in the company calendar. Several coaches would be waiting in the car park outside. They’d line up in an almost military line ready to take Jack and many of his colleagues, their wives, husbands and children away for a day of sand, sea, amusements and fun. Like the annual Christmas party it was never without its gossip or rumours buzzing around the factory on the following Monday morning.
Ghosts of stories continued to whisper at him from the shadows. Despite his thick gloves his hands really were as cold as ice. He never used to get as cold as this. Taking off a glove to look, he was surprised to see his hand was as cold and grey as a lifeless gravestone. The blue veins standing out against his white, almost transparent skin, added to the illusion that they were made from marble.
The ghosts vanished before his eyes and he was once again in the cold, dark, silent shell of the building. The wind was the only sound rattling through the skeletons of many broken windows.
Then, Jack became aware of another noise underneath the wind. Jack drew in his breath and held it there a moment, listening. There – he heard it again. A faint scraping dragging noise followed by rustling coming from the far end of the building. Jack was not alone.
All of Jack’s senses seemed to sharpen as he stood waiting, listening, and praying. Whatever was out there in the dark it seemed smaller but more agile than himself. Somehow Jack sensed that it wasn’t human.
Slowly he edged forward shining his torch in the direction of the noise. Something darted across his beam of light and then disappeared. A dark shadow briefly and then it was gone. Now multiple rustles and scurrying sounds emanated from the place where the creature had darted.
Shaking slightly, he shone his torch again in the direction of the sounds. A pile of dead leaves and crisp wrappers appeared to be moving and writhing in the ghostly light of his torch. Dark shapes scurried beneath the litter. Jack edged closer and them jumped when the moving mass gave out a squeal. As one of the dark creatures broke free running towards him he suddenly realised what it was. ‘Christ! Rats.’ he sighed with relief. Relaxing once again and with a slowing heart he did another sweep of the factory with his eyes.
Suddenly, out of the night, approaching footsteps crunched briskly across the frosted yard outside. Multiple footsteps. Jack’s heart began to race once again making him feel more alert and alive as he turned on his heels and stepped outside once more.
There were at least six of them, perhaps three girls, and three boys. The largest of the group raised his arm, beer bottle in hand, bringing it down smashing just inches in front of Jack’s feet. With his heart hammering faster now Jack waved his fists into the air. ‘Bloody kids,’ he muttered. ‘Hey you! STOPPIT. What d’ya think yaw playing at?’
His protests just produced laughter as stones whizzed past to the left of his face causing a windowpane to shatter. Glass sprinkled all around him like sharp raindrops. Cursing, he made a move towards the nearest lad who seemed so intent on causing further damage that he didn’t attempt to move or stop his barrage of stones. Jack thought that the youth today must be stupid to allow him to get so close. Breathing heavily he was just about to grab the youth when they all turned and fled. His hand missed the hooligan by inches. In that same moment he found himself blinded by the headlights of a car. He moved to the left a bit and as his eyes adjusted to the light saw two policemen step out.
‘Hurry up! They went that way,’ he said pointing back down the driveway. He was still panting a little from the exertion.
‘Looks like they’ve cleared off now’, said the stockier of the two to his colleague.
‘Yeah. Lets get back to the station. No point wasting our time here we’ll only get bogged down in paperwork. If we’re lucky we can fit in a nice hot cuppa before we clock off. And if you’re good I might even shout you to a bacon butty with all the trimmings.’
With that they got back into their car without a word or a second glance back at Jack and drove away.
‘Cheeky buggers,’ Jack muttered to himself. When he was younger the police commanded more respect and would have at least had the courtesy to acknowledge him. That was just plain ignorant. And after he’d nearly caught the little vandal too. In his opinion the police were just too soft nowadays. Too used to sitting on their fat arses all day instead of doing some real work in the community. Cup of tea indeed! He blew out a long breath and looked once again to the sky. It was tinged with pink now as dawn began to break. It looked like the beginnings of a cold but clear, sunny day.
Jack took in his last look around the old place. Pulling his cap down over his ears he gave his hands another rub against the cold and set off for his short walk home from work for the final time.
By 8.30 the next morning the sun had risen a little more on the new day and workmen in hard hats, bulldozers and other demolition equipment surrounded the place. Two of the workmen stood together a little away from the rest of the group, as they took in their view of the derelict factory.
‘Did you know the Night watchman, Jack, worked here for over thirty years? Loyal – never missed a day through illness, except when his wife died.’
‘Think he’ll come back and say goodbye to the old place?’ asked the second workman.
‘Hope not,’ he paused thoughtfully. ‘He’s been dead for over ten year.’


Judging comment
Jack did his duty. Thirty years as night-watchman, with never a day’ sick leave. They don’t come like that any more.

And the environment in which Jack worked doesn’t exist anymore either. The camaraderie of a big industrial factory, the staff weddings, the works’parties, the annual holiday outings; it is all part of a culture we no longer know and Wendy Fernridge captures it evocatively. To capture the scene, she has Jack as a ghost. He would probably have to be a ghost now to have lived and worked in that kind of forgotten environment.

But he is an interesting ghost, and Wendy poses some questions about him: he has a physical presence, complete with is cold hands and blue veins. But is he visible to the living people around him? Certainly the police do not react to his presence, and did the youth really throw the bottle at Jack or did he simply chuck it anywhere? The gang of youngsters didn’t say anything to Jack, didn’t hurl insults at him, and their stone-throwing just seems to have been random.

Perhaps, like the best ghosts, you cannot see Jack and as he makes his last journey home perhaps he is going to wherever it is that ghosts go.